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    dots Submission Name: I Achedots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Spoof/I hate you
    Total Views: 499
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    Description:
       She puts up such a front and some how only a select few family members can see this besides myself. She may be my biological mother however this is about the only common this we have... And even that is too much for me to bare.


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    dotsI Achedots
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    My heart aches for one person's presence.
    My soul searches for any sign of wholeheartedness love from them, toward me.
    My mind goes on to contemplate these action/emotions from ever actually occurring.
    To see empathy from them, to see in their eyes...
    Genuine empathy for the consistent pain I bare,
    due to their actions all throughout my life.
    I have been burdened with a torch,
    that has so gracefully been given to me at a very young age.
    A torch in which represents all the evil that exists in my short, yet, emotionally draining life.
    A torch that only burns solid red colored flames,
    always a subtle reminder for its true meaning.

    Point-in-hand, even with this pain, these burdens you have willingly given to me, Mother...

    I still ache so very much for this day...
    In which I feel you truly love me, for me.
    To know you love me, and I am NOT like everyone else you carefully place within your world.
    I would NOT be a pawn who you use and move around to best suit you.

    I ache for this day,
    the day that I can see.
    That I would be more to you than any kind of emotional or material gain.
    In which you have always felt you rightfully deserve.

    I will always, ache for my Mother's love.
    For my Mother's compassion,
    For her understanding,
    For her friendship,

    However, reality is that this will always and forever be unachievable!




    Submitted on 2012-05-08 04:32:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really touching, You've done a good job expressing your enter most thoughts! Good job!
    | Posted on 2012-05-15 00:00:00 | by ShameirE | [ Reply to This ]


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