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critcal eyes


Author: littlepoet
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critcal eyes




there are times to be critcal
there are times to criticize
there is a value for a good critique.

but you can carry it to far
you will crush my soul
and make me cry.

but i will carry on
I have come to crystallization
cruel words are cunnning and cutting.

but i will carry on
it takes a loving soul to say I forgive you
for hurting me.

though i don't think you
know what you are saying
stop your hurting me!

I know I'm not an american master
by far but I'm doing the best I can
I may be absentminded

but I'm absollutely
strong, loving and caring
I'm the the kind of person

if you need a hand
I will give the shirt off my back
if you need food I will feed you

if you need guidance
I can and will guide you
don't guilt me in to seeing it your way.




Submitted on 2012-05-08 20:34:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a very great write! I enjoyed reading this poem and like it very much!
Not alot of people are like that...
| Posted on 2012-05-14 00:00:00 | by janekostman09 | [ Reply to This ]
  i like youre message, yes thinks people say will hurt you, but it takes a stronge person to not only forgive those, but also continue to hold some care for them
| Posted on 2012-05-12 00:00:00 | by simpleandgreen | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked it! :)

I really enjoyed this last bit....

"if you need a hand
I will give the shirt off my back
if you need food I will feed you

if you need guidance
I can and will guide you
don't guilt me in to seeing it your way."
| Posted on 2012-05-11 00:00:00 | by Kube | [ Reply to This ]


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