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    dots Submission Name: I Gone Lost My Mind!!!!dots
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    Author: gothicgirl
    ASL Info:    23/f/recreant world
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 127/111/48
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 517
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1236



    Description:
       I don't know more random thoughts rather then a coherant process


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    dotsI Gone Lost My Mind!!!!dots
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    I' looked up from where I stood
    Watching as the clouds pass
    They adapt so quickly.
    I sat there imaging me sitting with them
    On top of mount Olympus
    But thoughts of grander only go so far
    And fall so quickly.
    I am but a speck of dust on the end of a flower
    A portion of what life has made me.

    5 parts whole and 5 parts missing
    Asking for my cup of sugar
    perhaps this will sweeten me
    perhaps this will change the recipe.

    My eyes have witnessed betrayal
    but she was so young then
    now my grass hopper, let me feel your soft skin, take it all in
    who is this monster?

    He is the prince of darkness
    he chases me until my last breath has been spent
    he swallows me and spits me out
    reduced to bird food.

    Close my eyes release this demon
    but he’s only staggered back
    he holds me in his claws
    if I said you had a nice body
    would you hold it against me?

    I finally wonder back
    Plummeting back to reality
    But a shadow of doubt awaits me
    Until I’m able to once again wonder….




    Submitted on 2012-05-08 21:36:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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