Black market tears

Author: expiring_touch ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 139 /260 /173 Words: 71

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Black market tears

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oh how I want to curl up in a bowl and cry And not care who hears My primal howlings through the wall Exploded With relived hysterics. Sometimes I wonder if this knife Which cuts Into my heart, unworthy Of salvation, Is driven By your own indifferent hand, not mine, And if, if for a moment, for you I were, or am enough.

Submitted on 2012-05-09 10:45:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i like the idea of Black Market Tears...are they really mine to cry...do i own them... emotion that is indifferent is worse than if it is really good or really bad... having the other person seem to not care one way or the other...whose fault is that..surely not the speaker in the poem... i would want the speaker to howl..let it out once and for all and move on...the other person is not worth it...especially since he or she is promoting a feeling that is a lack of self-worth on the part of the speaker... shout it out...move on... no one is worth this turmoil...especially when he or she seems not to care one way or the other. i like the way this piece evolves...it is different jacob

| Posted on 2012-05-09 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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