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    dots Submission Name: Fear the edgedots
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    Author: ChrystalR
    ASL Info:    23/Female/Norway
    Elite Ratio:    5.14 - 126/121/58
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       First poem written in quite a while, please be kind!


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    dotsFear the edgedots
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    Ice and flame will laugh out loud
    Earth and water in the dark
    Mountain bitter vain and proud
    Whispered pain still leaves a mark

    Angry hammer cracks the planks
    Hides the mirror that shows fear
    Sword points hold and steer the ranks
    From the edge where love is near

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    Submitted on 2012-05-09 16:36:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the cadence and the warrior references
    For me I feel like there is a woman who's
    Spirit is being forged in life's harsher battles
    Of Love and dominance
    | Posted on 2014-04-11 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      the edge of pain, the edge of darkness, the edge of life...sometimes we all seem to be right on it...we can sway one way or the other..

    and sometimes we fear love so much we back away from it...as if it were a sword, or the edge of a plank or the edge of a cliff...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-05-09 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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