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    dots Submission Name: Solar Powered Sistadots
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    Author: simpleandgreen
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 39/141/136
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       whew i even threw in a zeugma, awwwh snap


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    dotsSolar Powered Sistadots
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    I was feeling down,
    Shady, dark grey,
    Ick. But then a splendidly
    Sparkling stream of shiny gold
    Light shone through
    The dusty half open shutters.
    It called for me, beckoned me.
    It was where I should really be.
    I left the lightless lair
    And emerged outside. The summer
    Sun greeted me cheerfully.
    Oh how I've missed you so!
    It's supple rays penetrated
    Through flesh and bone,
    Going deep, like lighting
    A candle in a dark room,
    The light engulfs the blackness,
    As well as brings whole
    New perspectives.
    Man,
    It's so warm, it fills
    Me up with heat,
    comfort,
    Happiness and new solutions.
    I would say that my
    Personal light bulb is without a doubt
    Solar powered.




    Submitted on 2012-05-11 21:28:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is good. I liked the writing style. It gave me a need to be out in the sunshine lol.
    | Posted on 2012-05-13 00:00:00 | by ShadowsnLights | [ Reply to This ]


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