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    dots Submission Name: I will always love youdots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 975
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 590



    Description:
       Could be fiction, my mind is too consumed to decide


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    dotsI will always love youdots
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    Cold needles coalesce into warm retinal dreams,
    I become a beautiful moment that calls forth color when I think your name,
    the power of bliss wielded by your hand captures me, I am tame..

    but you can never know this for there is fear collecting in the base of my heart,
    should you discover my great thirst for your sweet company or see me lusting after your perfect lips,
    such power over me is unheard of in the echoes of my soul,
    this will always have to be my secret,
    but know this,
    You are in control.

    Svw




    Submitted on 2012-05-13 08:09:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this, it has such sweet lines that inspires me to write. To describe this as sweet maybe an understatement but this just blew me away.
    | Posted on 2013-02-01 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      strongly romantic thoughts...and wow---"i become a beautiful moment...when i think your name"

    that is really a powerful line...

    this one touched me.

    it is bold and shows such vulnerability...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-05-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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