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    dots Submission Name: Word Whoredots
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    Author: Magnolia Steele
    ASL Info:    30/female/Northwest CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 2492/1825/232
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWord Whoredots
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    ...and more
    She pleads
    Devours the seeds
    Of creation
    Carries a promise
    Of tomorrow-

    Tomorrow comes and goes
    exclamation marks
    On the sheets
    Time ages
    Them both
    Memories dry like ink




    Submitted on 2012-05-14 23:57:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice analogy...she and the words both...devouring the seeds as time ages both...

    memories dry...and she feels dried up...the words no longer come.

    i like how this is trimmed to the bone...but carries strong weight to it.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-05-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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