Lady Lie by Magnolia Steele

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Submission Name: Lady Lie dots

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Author:	Magnolia Steele
ASL Info:	30/female/Northwest CA
Elite Ratio:	4.71 - 2492/1825/232
Words:	63

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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Lady Lie dots

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Lady lips lingered lies
Slipped through cracks
Of lipstick
Free
By and by
rush in currents of
Mother blood and Father Rye
Mark her cheeks
No surprise
Fetch a pretty penny
For a lass that
Can undo
The strings of nature
Carry the moon
Between her thighs
Lies
slip through the cracks
breathe in truth
die

Submitted on 2012-05-14 23:58:32 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i see much double meaning through this...two uses of "lies" "slipping through the cracks"

she lives a lie yet in reality her plight in life is truth...and she gives of herself without reserve...lying and lying...

carrying the moon between her thighs, that many a guy would like to lasso...

"Buffalo Gal can you come out tonight!"

i like the implications in your work...less is more...and you create so many possibilities of double meanings---

i like abstractness and suggestiveness...use it much myself.

look forward to reading more of your work.

jacob
| Posted on 2012-05-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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