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    dots Submission Name: Lady Liedots
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    Author: Magnolia Steele
    ASL Info:    30/female/Northwest CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 2492/1825/232
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLady Liedots
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    Lady lips lingered lies
    Slipped through cracks
    Of lipstick
    Free
    By and by
    rush in currents of
    Mother blood and Father Rye
    Mark her cheeks
    No surprise
    Fetch a pretty penny
    For a lass that
    Can undo
    The strings of nature
    Carry the moon
    Between her thighs
    Lies
    slip through the cracks
    breathe in truth
    die




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    ||| Comments |||
      i see much double meaning through this...two uses of "lies" "slipping through the cracks"

    she lives a lie yet in reality her plight in life is truth...and she gives of herself without reserve...lying and lying...

    carrying the moon between her thighs, that many a guy would like to lasso...

    "Buffalo Gal can you come out tonight!"

    i like the implications in your work...less is more...and you create so many possibilities of double meanings---

    i like abstractness and suggestiveness...use it much myself.

    look forward to reading more of your work.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-05-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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