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    dots Submission Name: Empty bottlesdots
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    Author: SetmyselfonFire
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 41/55/47
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    Description:
       a sickness grown and fertilized among the oldest of souls.


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    dotsEmpty bottlesdots
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    Sweet and cold a dead end road,
    Inhabitant of an empty soul.
    Traveling fast it intersects,
    with feelings that never hold

    No concept lost but never found
    No reasons left behind
    The guilt will always weigh you down
    & mutalize your mind.

    Age does not bring closure,
    to this sickness hard to fight.
    It opens eyes and reassures
    there are demons deep inside.

    No one takes the blame
    critics grow among the crowds
    Setting fuel upon the flames
    They never hear each other out..

    Their minds is gone, heart beats fast
    no slowing down the pace
    Destined only for their world to crash
    If they could only see their face




    Submitted on 2012-05-15 09:37:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This piece hits home for me. Growing up with a primarily alcoholic family. Though this gives me an insight I've not really seen before. I'm not one to nit pick and judge formality with poetry. I base my thoughts on the context the piece is about. This really is quite brilliant.
    ~Dominique
    | Posted on 2012-05-15 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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