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    Author: blankscreen
    ASL Info:    22/f/NY
    Elite Ratio:    5.57 - 222/196/163
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I know you are trying to forget
    And I deserve all I've gotten
    I just wanted to let you know

    That it hurts just to breath
    When you are not here
    Numbers and letters don't make sense
    Shirts turn inside out and backwards
    When I've put them on a million times before

    I will always love you
    And I know
    It will never stop hurting
    That you let me go

    I've made mistakes
    And been through so much
    But this time hurts the worst
    Because I tried so hard to make it work
    And ended up making it
    Broken

    They all tell me it's ok
    That everything will work out
    And we will both have a better future
    apart
    But I don't listen
    Because all I want
    is to hold your hand
    and kiss your nose

    I cant sleep without you near me
    Or wake up without your face upon my chest
    I can't breath without your love
    Knowing I will always be second best
    Because I will never match up to who you wanted me to become
    And you were always too perfect
    For less than that

    Maybe you will move on
    Maybe you'll forget me
    And always remember how broken we were
    But I'll remember hearing your keys jingle as you ran up the steps
    How you were the only one who could make me
    stop
    and breath.
    But now I can't.
    Overworked and overtired.
    I would give it all up
    for one more chance.

    I miss you.




    Submitted on 2012-05-16 10:54:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The nose again... real. There's something special about a nose kiss.
    | Posted on 2012-05-17 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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