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    dots Submission Name: The Epitaph of Darknessdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 238
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Epitaph of Darknessdots
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    A tear would not become you world
    It would not speak of what you have lost
    In passing it was only your greatness
    And you cannot weep for which you knew not

    Such merit will not reveal itself
    In the glass ball reflection of your fanatical smiles
    But lay in the parched throat of maybe
    And dissipate on your insatiable tongue

    I can no longer hold you to the embrace of my heart
    Though you know it not
    As still you seek the hungry fist
    To clench tight and grasp the illusive shadows
    Of a dream you once had
    As it falls in molten petals, dry and cold
    The tears you weep
    Will not become your world
    But a spectre only of the hope you had

    Your eternal reflection in the mirror of infinity
    Was something you never touched
    You fell silent, dumb and sightless
    To the atoms of dust you were made of

    And that lingering premise of unspoken love
    The rage and passion your pretence of
    Lays upon the untilled earth
    Untended, un-watered of desert seed
    The sand which has become your blood
    Has become you unwept
    And no salutation to your greatness
    But a whispered hint of the potential you had

    A day of mourning amidst the stars
    The epitaph of darkness
    Speaks of all you had and lost
    Memorial in the silence







    Submitted on 2012-05-16 13:28:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aha! sounds like you had a crush, transformed to love, only to be the one destroyed and crushed!! something in all this?
    | Posted on 2012-05-19 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]


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