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    dots Submission Name: Under What Criteria?dots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 935
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Remembering growing up and all the values instilled in me.


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    dotsUnder What Criteria?dots
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    The first time I tried alcohol
    I was only five
    Unattended youth bound to fall,
    I remembered my father bathe me
    and as soon as my Mom came home,
    I had to hide.

    Grew up in the worst neighborhood
    Far from a typical Beverly Hills
    I knew my life was heading for disaster,
    I knew it would
    Just the thought of an unsteady future,
    Gave me the chills
    Just like the fear of growing up should.

    Started to mimic the wrong attire
    Just to try to fit in
    Didn't know the shoes didn't fit me,
    They soon grew heavy and tired
    and the constant reminder that
    I was headed for a life of sin
    Connected all my judgmental wires.

    T.V. portrayed women as a sexual icon
    Yet the teachings of my parents
    Was to value them,
    The words made my conscience
    Weigh a ton
    To an Idea that was so sinister,
    Peace came to my mind knowing
    That I to have a Mother and sisters.

    So if the world is as ugly
    Portrayed by the media,
    Then roughly
    I belong under what criteria?




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      what you wear and where you grew up does not make the man. i do very much enjoy your writings. i love the last line i think that question is a standing one in every ones head.... thank you again k bye
    | Posted on 2012-05-17 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]


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