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    dots Submission Name: Random ramblingsdots

    Author: AbsolutelyLost
    ASL Info:    27/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 54/41/33
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    If I could ask you to be mine,
    I would be expressing my will and not thine.

    I get splattered by your words,
    And amused by your glance.
    Infact I get mesmerized,
    When you smile at my glance.

    I wish that you smile,
    And make me cross the mile.

    For I don't know if I can take the path,
    That makes me walk miles and miles,
    In reach of the immortal trails,
    Of your smiles and my miles.

    Submitted on 2012-05-18 14:22:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Mmmm this is left me thinking what (if any) underling meaning is!! Left me wounding and the wheels turning :)

    | Posted on 2012-05-21 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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