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    dots Submission Name: Caredots

    Author: Esophagus1
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 231/279/149
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Rotation complete.
    Another cycle done.
    Living off what the sun secretes
    we had thought this battle won.

    Mercy, just another shade
    of this endless suffering
    in debts never to be payed
    and the lies they're covering.

    Pray for the end
    as everything falls
    so long as morals do not bend
    and the short are supported by the tall.

    Never once had I tried to be part of you
    Never once had you walked in the other shoe
    I had given everything to turn and devour you
    I had only desired the truth of truths

    The end is here now and what will we do?
    The end is here now, but do we know who?
    It's the end and I know what I'll do
    It's the end so know that I blame you

    A nightmare inside a nightmare
    with no chance to ever wake
    A dream inside a dream without care
    from which there is no escape.

    Pointlessness rearing its head dominates
    as violence, anger, and hatred salivate
    for all existences malicious intent.
    The life of reality now severely bent
    we struggle for air in this toilet
    caring so much for this life of shit.

    Submitted on 2012-05-19 16:53:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow!!! This is amazing!! You had me from beginning to end! This speaks volumes! I cannot believe how amazingly worded this is. How loud this speaks to me!! I love everything about this post you got a special talent to write and write it the way ya see it!! KUDOS

    | Posted on 2012-05-21 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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