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    dots Submission Name: Heart Neglecteddots
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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       The power of unconditional love is unrelenting.


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    dotsHeart Neglecteddots
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    So I sit here speechless,
    the words echo in my mind.
    Pondering a question,
    thats been brewing for some time.
    Ive heard it many a way,
    but never bothered to listen.
    Stuck it farther back in line,
    importance an issue, or is it?
    Attention at hand,
    I have otherwise to hinder.
    My excuse? Too busy,
    so I left you among the cinders.
    Black with ash you became,
    but that bothered me none.
    And as you lay there hidden,
    hard to find, became a plus one.
    So I sat by your fireside,
    with a silly little grin.
    Thinking I got one past you, yet again.
    Only then, did it sink in.
    I desperatly searched for you,
    even dug in 6deep.
    Started to accept the fact,
    that with my neglect, you left.
    Never to return back. But I was decieved.
    "For never shall I leave you lone."
    I heard that soft whisper speak.
    "I just found a new home.. You see?"




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