[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: Heart Neglecteddots

    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 546
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1056

       The power of unconditional love is unrelenting.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsHeart Neglecteddots

    So I sit here speechless,
    the words echo in my mind.
    Pondering a question,
    thats been brewing for some time.
    Ive heard it many a way,
    but never bothered to listen.
    Stuck it farther back in line,
    importance an issue, or is it?
    Attention at hand,
    I have otherwise to hinder.
    My excuse? Too busy,
    so I left you among the cinders.
    Black with ash you became,
    but that bothered me none.
    And as you lay there hidden,
    hard to find, became a plus one.
    So I sat by your fireside,
    with a silly little grin.
    Thinking I got one past you, yet again.
    Only then, did it sink in.
    I desperatly searched for you,
    even dug in 6deep.
    Started to accept the fact,
    that with my neglect, you left.
    Never to return back. But I was decieved.
    "For never shall I leave you lone."
    I heard that soft whisper speak.
    "I just found a new home.. You see?"

    Submitted on 2012-05-19 18:04:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    Bond written by saartha
    You do, I Do written by poetotoe
    Neither Here nor There written by layDsayD
    Before, Now, & After written by SincerWritinAsh
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Fasade written by jackz
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Estranged / Shocks written by Daniel Barlow
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Brigit written by endlessgame23
    written by Daniel Barlow
    4th of July written by layDsayD
    Push written by JanePlane
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    Linger written by saartha
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]