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    dots Submission Name: Following Medots
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    Author: eggshells
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 31/82/75
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    dotsFollowing Medots
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    Monday night,
    My baby left me.
    Tuesday night,
    Sent me her key.

    I suppose I'll never know
    Just what demon is
    Following me.

    Wednesday night,
    Found I had not one kid,
    But three.
    Thursday night,
    Signed her off away from me.

    I suppose I'll never know
    Just what demon is
    Following me.

    Friday night,
    My work asked me to leave.
    Saturday night,
    No money for rent,
    Cause I'm not working.

    I suppose I'll never know
    Just what demon is
    Following me.

    Sunday night,
    I left that place,
    Traveled into the black

    Left that demon in the dust,
    Cleared my mind of rust,
    And I ain't ever lookin' back.

    fin fin fin
    Eggshells




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    ||| Comments |||
      sometimes we just get a streak of bad...and it just keeps following us around...won't let go.

    but i like that the speaker shrugs it off and says..."i'll never look back"---

    probably best that way...looking forward is the way to go.

    i liked the personification of "work" in that line..."work asked me to leave"

    nice phrasing there.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-05-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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