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    dots Submission Name: Dark Moondots
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    Author: Wonderwords
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 15/24/25
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       My daughter was in a lot of emotional pain last night.


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    dotsDark Moondots
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    Dark Moon

    I had the swords in my back
    Last night
    I was well and truly defeated
    I lay down and waves of
    Despair washed over me

    I want to cut out my heart
    I am in so much pain
    You said

    You felt your pain
    I felt my defeat

    Today is a new day
    And we will talk about
    Deep matters
    And shampoo,
    Mundane things,
    To mix with the blues,
    Sorrows changing
    Colours, hues

    Tears, palour
    Recuperation
    Letting go
    Music playing
    Today is another day
    Dark moon
    Banished
    Gone away






    Submitted on 2012-05-21 07:50:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thanks Damien, I was really worried about my daughter, but we are picking up the pieces. She is feeling broken hearted because of a boy. Just for a few hours I felt very defeated.
    | Posted on 2012-05-21 00:00:00 | by Wonderwords | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds like you were broken hearted for a short minute, found someone else or reconciliated and things are groovy again,...cheers!!
    | Posted on 2012-05-21 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]


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