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    Author: tped
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 2/1/1
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    Description:
       My first bit of hate poetry towards HER!!!


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    Neeks, why you such a freaks? You wont give me a tour of your house, because you're quiet as a mouse.

    You've got a nice ass, but that doesnt give you a pass
    to shag mr. moose, that slimy, little lass.

    And Rudy, with his sexy stride, who i can confide
    all the times i lied
    when i said i loved neeks, righ'?!

    So this is the end of my poem,
    if you dont like it you can blow em'.
    by them, i mean a knob,
    cause that is considered socially degrading in some circles.

    Peace out homes




    Submitted on 2012-05-21 21:37:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the words ring truth, quite beautiful. who is this neeks? why would she not let you see her house? oh yeah its probably because she finds you strange and you think she's shagging a moose. Anyways, i dont see anything wrong with her. Maybe its just all you. She seems hawt, with the nice ass and all. So yea, shitty writing, but interesting message
    | Posted on 2012-05-21 00:00:00 | by simpleandgreen | [ Reply to This ]


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