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    dots Submission Name: Aladdin's Dilemmadots
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    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2779/1297/258
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsAladdin's Dilemmadots
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    Wish I could live
    In a movie world
    Guttin’ all the villains
    As I save the girl

    Wish I could ride
    In a fancy car
    Stocked with the best
    Like a rollin’ bar

    Wish I was sly
    As a wealthy gent
    Livin’ off the dole
    Of the government

    Wish I could crash
    In a sprawlin’ home
    Frontin’ some respect
    With a fine-tooth comb

    Wish I could master
    All the sickest moves
    And let the also-rans
    Bitch about the rules

    Wish there were wishes
    Tall enough to dream
    Until that day comes
    Let the whole world sing –

    Hey-noni-noni-noni-noni-noni-na-na
    Hey-na-na-na-na-na-na
    Hey-noni-noni-noni-noni-noni-na-na
    Hey-na-na-na-na-na-na

    A little bit of nothin’
    Just sorta stings
    Burn it all down
    Join hands and sing…

    Hey-noni-noni-noni-noni-noni-na-na
    Hey-na-na-na-na-na-na
    Hey-noni-noni-noni-noni-noni-na-na
    Hey-na-na-na-na-na-na




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      So at my count, you've got six wishes here. The genie traditionally gives only three. So that's Aladdin's dilemma - how to handle a greedy wisher? Lol

    You need to hand this one over to Paul Simon or Jason Mraz, put a little pop tune to it with a reggae backbeat. As always, I love your work!

    Annie
    | Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is fun stuff. It seems very "rappy". I can almost see the video in my mind.

    My favorite lines:

    A little bit of nothin’
    Just sorta stings

    Yep, this is bold and provocative and speaks to the want that is created from just seeing this type of lifestyle exalted and romanticized on TV and in the movies. And through music, of course.

    And yet, as Jacob points out, what would it really feel like? Would it bring a sense of depth and understanding to our lives? Would it create joy, bring inner peace? Evidence seems to be to the contrary. How many stars and people with money end up with drug habits, or commit suicide or have eating disorders or mental illness, alcoholism? "Things" don't seem to quell demons. In fact, at times they seem to fuel the demons' fires.

    Just sayin' . . .

    Good write, though. I enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2012-06-16 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      i too wish i could do all these things...at least for one day, just to say i could and did...then i would want to go back to being little ole me.

    you phrase so smoothly...seems effortless...but carries so much zing.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-05-23 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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