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    dots Submission Name: Like a Flowerdots
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    Author: simpleandgreen
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 39/141/136
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLike a Flowerdots
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    It is like a flower.
    It first emerges unexpectedly
    From the ground as a bud, pushing
    Its way through dirt and grime.
    Holding so much potential
    Between its sepals.
    It starts to grow. It starts
    To mature and experience
    The wonders of the world.
    The sun kissing its leaves,
    The spectacular butterflies
    Hovering about.
    It matures fast as time goes on.
    Its in its prime. its roots run deep.
    Stem elongates and petals blossom.
    But as fast as it grew up
    It starts to decline.
    The wind whips the petals away,
    The roots become shirvelled and plagued.
    It gasps for air. It pleads for water.
    It becomes desperate and unbearable.
    With its last breath,it starts to brown
    And begins degrading.
    Its not a total loss. That flower
    Gave carbon to anther one.
    Another bud took its place, and
    It grows even stronger. Yeah, that flower
    Was full of good times, but now its time to
    Move on.




    Submitted on 2012-05-26 01:08:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Cycle of life portrayed beautifully in this one. I like how you express the message simply and just let it flow without forcing words.
    ..good job here

    Jen
    | Posted on 2012-09-26 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Cycle of birth and death and life yields life. This is the story of every life whether a plant or human. good job.
    | Posted on 2012-05-29 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]


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