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    dots Submission Name: My first original workdots
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    Author: cartoon autopsy
    ASL Info:    32 m illinois
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 53/63/22
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Venting
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    dotsMy first original workdots
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    Do not blame me for I am your son
    for you are my mother and my father.

    I've only become what was created from the both of you.

    In these quiet hours of constant torment and termoil I have given and received more than most.

    But I am not proud.

    And i will not boast.

    And or brag
    for you are my mother and my father
    do not blame me
    for I am your son.

    Our joys
    and delights
    Neither you or i are right
    you will not extinguish me

    For i am your light

    For you are my Mother.

    For you are my Father

    For i am your Son.




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      The honesty in the is heightened by the structure and that to me is what makes it distinctive and enjoyable.

    Thank you for sharing!
    | Posted on 2015-12-23 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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