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    dots Submission Name: You and Medots
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    Author: darkwhtangel
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 12/10/2
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 720
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    Description:
       A new awakening, of my sleeping passion.


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    dotsYou and Medots
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    You and Me

    You came in
    Came in so unexpected
    You looking at me and
    Me stealing peeks at you

    I can't help myself
    I feel my whole body flush
    I have to smile

    Your close in my dreams and
    Always in my thoughts.
    Forbidden
    They set me on fire.

    My heart beats
    So fast
    Can you hear it?




    Submitted on 2012-05-27 07:10:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the simplicity in this. The last lines inspired me to write a haiku. Here it is:

    My heart beats faster
    and faster, faster, faster
    Can you hear it love?
    | Posted on 2012-11-29 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Kathy...


    simple but so smooth with the wording and flow of feeling...i really like this.

    i think you meant "you're close in my dreams"

    i really like the idea of "hearing the speed of heart"

    rather than feeling it...that is cool.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-11-27 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this so much. It is like love acted out on paper. I miss feeling excited over someone. This reminds me how much I miss it.
    | Posted on 2012-11-20 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]
      Short, sweet and to the point. I like it.
    | Posted on 2012-06-08 00:00:00 | by TheInvisible | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW VERY GOOD!
    | Posted on 2012-06-07 00:00:00 | by janekostman09 | [ Reply to This ]


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