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    dots Submission Name: Tall and Mighty Treesdots
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    Author: strike three
    ASL Info:    32/m/Ethiopia
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 49/54/28
    Words: 12
    Class/Type: Haiku/
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    Tall and mighty trees,
    Flicker to an autumn breeze,
    Gently shedding leaves.




    Submitted on 2012-05-27 07:52:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      giving into death in a peaceful way...there is something else after the literal autumn...we will shed our leaves and find another season in which to dwell...there will be some kind of rebirth...the mystery is...rebirth to what?

    but i like the idea of "gently shedding leaves"--

    letting go...not fighting it...

    sort of opposite to "do not go gentle into that good night"

    like your words.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-05-27 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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