Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: In Utter Dismay, Bleed the New Waysdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 622/962/454
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 930
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 859



    Description:
       I'm falling back to my old patterns here...I know I am slipping...


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsIn Utter Dismay, Bleed the New Waysdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Twisted around my enemies,
    Forgiveness given,
    Reality taken,
    The whole world around me.

    But why can't you see..

    All of this shit coming out of me,
    My broken wrists, my broken dreams,
    This is all of my suffering,
    These are the ways I've learned to bleed.

    The lies,
    The fucking replacement.
    I've played this route before,
    I've been this route before..

    I drift in and out of todays lullabye,
    I've felt grounds caving in,
    Skies falling,
    Breathing in,
    Breathing in,
    I need reasons to believe,
    I need something to hang on too.

    Bleeding out,
    No hope primitive to this failure.
    You have no indication of how much I hurt,
    Nor will you ever...




    Submitted on 2012-05-28 21:19:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    195244

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry