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In Utter Dismay, Bleed the New Ways

Author: Crestfallenman
ASL Info:    24/M/CA
Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 622 /962 /454
Words: 118
Class/Type: Poetry /Alone
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I'm falling back to my old patterns here...I know I am slipping...

In Utter Dismay, Bleed the New Ways

Twisted around my enemies,
Forgiveness given,
Reality taken,
The whole world around me.

But why can't you see..

All of this shit coming out of me,
My broken wrists, my broken dreams,
This is all of my suffering,
These are the ways I've learned to bleed.

The lies,
The fucking replacement.
I've played this route before,
I've been this route before..

I drift in and out of todays lullabye,
I've felt grounds caving in,
Skies falling,
Breathing in,
Breathing in,
I need reasons to believe,
I need something to hang on too.

Bleeding out,
No hope primitive to this failure.
You have no indication of how much I hurt,
Nor will you ever...

Submitted on 2012-05-28 21:19:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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