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    dots Submission Name: Chancedots
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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsChancedots
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    When I look at you,
    my eyes hold that glare.
    The one that speaks so freely,
    open to possibility, hope & despair.

    I caution my mind to adjust view,
    even dare.
    Stubborn, I squeeze them shut.
    Yet, youíre still there.
    Along with this harnessed force,
    burrowed so deep in a half-lit lair.

    My lips cant help but quiver,
    I bite them back.
    And again my body shivers.
    No doubt its shared.

    A want thatís never been so strong.
    A wait thatís never felt so long.
    Im bare.

    At last I find a game, so fair,
    Id stay all day watch& cheer.
    Got me in a constant stance,
    no need for a chair.

    So forgive my socalled weakness
    and random acts of care.
    It is not my fault my soul urges you near.

    And as I notice with half a glance,
    the sadness in your eyes.
    It doesnít help to think IF I had a chance,
    Id make you smile from the inside.
    And that my friend is RARE




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