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    dots Submission Name: Surprisedots
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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 60/63/36
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsSurprisedots
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    Gone for sometime,
    beating only to survive.
    My heart, at loves demise.
    Seemed hopeful, yet shy.
    To start, a careless smile.
    But bewilderment upon my eyes,
    as I stayed along for awhile.
    Coaxed by the spark,
    the butterflies inside.
    Now the cards in place, pokerface style.
    The wager replaced, held in file.
    You Go All In, face beguiled.
    How clear the sign, within my smile.
    You show first, Ill stay&watch awhile.
    For you are in fact,
    the wonder within my heart,
    the every thought within my mile óż




    Submitted on 2012-05-29 09:41:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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