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    dots Submission Name: Come Alive?dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsCome Alive?dots
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    Motionless ... no expression speared across my now blank face
    with hopes that if I hold my breath long enough
    my only wish will come alive...
    the need I feel runs deeper than my darken soul...
    deeper than this blackened heart of mine
    this desire I have screams out at each person who stares into my eyes

    However reality comes back to me quickly as I exhale..
    Now hitting rock bottom
    I need to accept the fact, you are not coming home to me today...
    There will be no happiness for me
    No light to brighten these gloomy parts of my world...

    Nevertheless I still find myself..
    Holding my breath long enough will somehow make my deepest desire come alive..




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