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    dots Submission Name: No Longer in the Backrounddots
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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Rant/Misc
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    dotsNo Longer in the Backrounddots
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    Did you know I used to hide
    while you played?
    Sit by myself, my eyes cry,
    my heart pray.

    And when the bell would ring,
    signal start of day.
    Id stand up tall & wipe my face.
    Inexistent ignorance,
    no ones looking anyway.

    Walk-in head held up proud,
    papers in hand, all A's.
    The snickers&bickers
    seemed to bother me none,
    down those long hallways.

    Fake smiles given, everywhichway.
    And Id swallow down the hurt&pain,
    steady my hands & quicken my pace.
    To those lonely stalls,
    where again Id pray.

    And God did bless me,
    with charisma, strength, power & brains. Although I didnt know back then.
    A typical plain Jane.

    Id sing my heart out,
    but noone would stop&listen,
    nevermind stay.
    Id run my fastest, but
    "run faster", youd say.

    Never enough or too much?
    Probably just afraid, but thats okay.
    I stood on the sidelines
    & just watched the game.
    but NOW Im ready to play.




    Submitted on 2012-05-30 21:38:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thank you so much. All of my work is free written based on my own personal experiances. So the power and intensity youre feeling is exactly what I was aiming for. Uplifting! :)
    | Posted on 2012-06-08 00:00:00 | by Darkwarrior | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my goodness this is just amazing this is perfect i can completely relate as i am sure you will see that many of us can this is so powerfull you found the perfect words and shaped them... Molded them into what you wanted to say you let it all out and i see that this is just amazing!!! So amazing it must go somewhere... Where you ask hehe on my favorite's list!!! KUDOS you got some raw talent!!

    Jackz!!!
    | Posted on 2012-05-31 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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