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    dots Submission Name: Fabric version 2dots
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    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsFabric version 2dots
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    You left a hole
    In the fabric of my life

    Just below the heart
    Your claws caught hold

    Now my hands tremble
    As I try to write this patch

    To keep everything
    From unraveling

    Did I trust too soon?
    Did I do something wrong?

    I just dont know

    So here I sit
    Trying to weave

    A new pattern

    something to endure
    The test of time

    You left a hole
    In the fabric of my life

    Just below the heart
    Your claws caught hold

    Now my hands are trembling

    Pray ill never be
    So naive again




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      "write this patch"
    man, i like that line bunches...

    this concept works well...very nice metaphor for heartbreak...and the empty space we are left with afterward.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-06-02 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Naivety can be a good thing showing that we are still unharmed enough to be believing people will be good. I know it might seem counter intuitive, considering, but I feel it's a good thing to be able to give. I hope that lacuna in your life heals still leaving you with a modicum of your innocence intact.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2012-06-02 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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