Fabric version 2 by Mithrandir

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Submission Name: Fabric version 2 dots

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Author:	Mithrandir
ASL Info:	28/m/N.Y.
Elite Ratio:	4.62 - 452/681/113
Words:	109

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
Total Views:	651
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	712

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this is the final version.

Fabric version 2 dots

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You left a hole
In the fabric of my life

Just below the heart
Your claws caught hold

Now my hands tremble
As I try to write this patch

To keep everything
From unraveling

Did I trust too soon?
Did I do something wrong?

I just dont know

So here I sit
Trying to weave

A new pattern

something to endure
The test of time

You left a hole
In the fabric of my life

Just below the heart
Your claws caught hold

Now my hands are trembling

Pray ill never be
So naive again

Submitted on 2012-06-02 13:38:15 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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"write this patch"
man, i like that line bunches...

this concept works well...very nice metaphor for heartbreak...and the empty space we are left with afterward.

jacob
| Posted on 2012-06-02 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
Naivety can be a good thing showing that we are still unharmed enough to be believing people will be good. I know it might seem counter intuitive, considering, but I feel it's a good thing to be able to give. I hope that lacuna in your life heals still leaving you with a modicum of your innocence intact.

Bruce
| Posted on 2012-06-02 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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