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    dots Submission Name: Sackzzzdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 395
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    dotsSackzzzdots
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    Something that tastes of chocolate
    But like potato chips has that satisfying crunch
    And
    Needs to be a chewable
    And
    Chilli
    Filled with nutzzz
    With coconut and tomato
    A hint of Basil and Oregano
    Then cheese

    Yes cheeezzzye cheese

    While honey floats on a cracker tease
    With pickle
    The flavour flood of sudden seafood
    Which reminds you of chicken
    Beef and mustard sandwich
    On a cucumber slice

    With strawberryzzz
    Yes and vol-au-vent rattlesnake mushroom pastries
    A Sinsemilla munchie binge
    The one packet fills all
    Mouthful
    Solutionzzz

    A Sunday roast parsnip
    Of an English breakfast
    And buttered garlic with escargot
    In a little flak jacketzzz of culinary explosions
    An taste bud demolitions

    Bake bean and banana tuna salads
    Apricot waffle and frogs legs souffl
    All smoked in a pheasant
    In one pop open packet of crunchable delight
    With ice cream
    And pistachio hundreds and thousands chipzzz
    Whiff of mint in a fresh fish market
    Fifteen year old single malt whisky
    Partially laced and alcoholic
    And sends you on a psilocybin trip

    Sackzzz





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    ||| Comments |||
      I get the feeling you are hungry. o_o
    Also, this is really cool. Not sure what you're up to with the zzz's, but at least you were consistent with them, so they sort of flowed through.

    ...are you stoned? xP
    | Posted on 2012-06-08 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]


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