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    Author: Iram
    ASL Info:    25/F/from your world
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 50/62/55
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    My feel is your deepest desire
    I have seen the breath in your throat
    Your pulse, my eyes, my ferocity
    My words would never take your virginity
    Would never kiss your oily neck
    Would never be in your bed
    You would drink my poems, not my veins
    I have seen you losing me
    And again.




    Submitted on 2012-06-10 10:01:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice but vague
    | Posted on 2012-06-14 00:00:00 | by kingsley | [ Reply to This ]


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