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    dots Submission Name: Breathingdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 137/243/158
    Words: 24
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBreathingdots
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    What am I but a wicked fish
    A hook drawn tightly
    Through its solar plexus
    And even a more wicked thought
    To discontinue
    Breathing.




    Submitted on 2012-06-11 05:58:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the repetition of "wicked" here. I like how the giving up is seen as "wicked" rather than sad. It is an interesting idea.

    Jane
    | Posted on 2012-06-19 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this Yulia, it is dense and complete, so that if it were a rock you could just pick it up and wear it as a piece of jewelry.

    See 'Wishing Stone' for the type of accoutrement i mean.

    It's kind of harsh (this poem) but there is also softness about it, vulnerability and a precious sense, strength in completeness.

    good work you.
    | Posted on 2012-06-15 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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