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    dots Submission Name: Lollipop Kissesdots
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    Author: Black Angel
    ASL Info:    22/F/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 16/96/96
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 587
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    dotsLollipop Kissesdots
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    Hand in hand they run
    Grass above their heads
    Lost in a world
    Of a seven year old’s
    Fantasy

    Summer heat hangs thick
    Sweat clings hair to her face
    Sweat clings a shirt to his back
    Cicadas chirp and butterflies flutter
    Still lost in the world
    Of a seven year old’s
    Fantasy

    Under an oak tree they sit
    Gasping for air that eludes them
    A lollipop is revealed from his pocket
    A smile dances on her lips
    They take turns enjoying the taste
    Sharing lollipop kisses
    Forever lost in the world
    Of a seven year old’s
    Fantasy




    Submitted on 2012-06-13 03:25:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      until the weary world weaves dreams from dust
    we'll need to trust the child in each of us
    to gather as much magic as we can find
    in a simple kiss outside of time
    | Posted on 2012-06-23 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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