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Lollipop Kisses

Author: Black Angel
ASL Info:    22/F/Tx
Elite Ratio:    2 - 16 /96 /96
Words: 101
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Lollipop Kisses

Hand in hand they run
Grass above their heads
Lost in a world
Of a seven year old’s

Summer heat hangs thick
Sweat clings hair to her face
Sweat clings a shirt to his back
Cicadas chirp and butterflies flutter
Still lost in the world
Of a seven year old’s

Under an oak tree they sit
Gasping for air that eludes them
A lollipop is revealed from his pocket
A smile dances on her lips
They take turns enjoying the taste
Sharing lollipop kisses
Forever lost in the world
Of a seven year old’s

Submitted on 2012-06-13 03:25:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  until the weary world weaves dreams from dust
we'll need to trust the child in each of us
to gather as much magic as we can find
in a simple kiss outside of time
| Posted on 2012-06-23 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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