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PaPa


Author: _n3pt
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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I've always felt the script format to seem poetic (or could be). I've been toying with it for some time now, capturing conversations and moments in life. Let me know what you think. I hope it pushes the medium.


PaPa



Asher, 7
Me, beyond 7

The child is engaged in an act of building block construction

I am engaged in an act of survival, dodging traffic, keeping us alive

ASHER: Terrorists blew up the 2 towers.
ME: Yup. That was really sad.
ASHER: Are there still terrorists?
ME: Unfortunately, but we have highly trained soldiers fighting a war trying to stop them.
ASHER: Did you ever fight in a war?
ME: No, but my grandfather fought in World War 2.
ASHER: Did he fight terrorists?
ME: He fought Nazis. Which are kinda like terrorists only worse. And better dressed.
ASHER: What was his name?
ME: I called him "PaPa."
ASHER: No, what was his REAL name?

I started to cry.
I hadn't thought about my grandfather for a long (too long) time.
And here was my son asking about a man he never knew.

ASHER: What's wrong?
ME: Nothing. His name was Carlis. And he was a great and brave man.
ASHER: That's right. I've heard his name before.

The conversation then turned to Lego's and video games.




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