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    dots Submission Name: tendrilsdots
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    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.76 - 419/435/131
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotstendrilsdots
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    it is the attachment
    that catches the eye
    these plants that climb
    and reach for blue
    for sun
    for someplace
    beyond the confines
    of earth

    they creep
    on the backs
    of other plants
    or trees
    or walls
    that give them
    nothing
    but a hard
    upward bound
    surface

    never too smooth
    for the thready stems
    to stick to

    never
    so smooth
    as you




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      "they creep
    on the backs
    of other plants
    or trees
    or walls
    that give them
    nothing
    but a hard
    upward bound
    surface"

    For some reason this poem, and especially this line brings about people who try and get close to you, as in, a person may be doing something amazing, but this other person(say the creeper), who see's this persons amazing skills tries and succeeds to get close to these people and use this persons skills for their benifit (the intruder is doing this) but in the same way the wall tries it's best to push them away...but they can't...
    | Posted on 2012-07-03 00:00:00 | by KeeperOfLight | [ Reply to This ]
      some plants crawl
    toward a hoped for light
    before an eclipse
    seals over their eyes

    and what they ascended
    has shaken their grip
    as they shed a love
    that gives darkness the slip
    | Posted on 2012-06-15 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      What this says and what it is overwhelmed by are not the same things, sure there is bitterness but what i feel in this is that you would beg this person.


    I admire how much it must have cost you to allow the words to grow up to that.

    With so much pain in one place you will bust, and you can sleep and you can sleep and you can do all manner of things or maybe it's that you're forced into a form of evolution, and you can form it, and have it go some place. It takes a conscientious person to do that. So, I don't see this as a poem, but as a most honest expression.
    | Posted on 2012-06-14 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, gotta think this is about a player. Or just someone who uses others to get ahead in life.
    And maybe this attachment is a one way thing?

    Well, that's what it seems to be about at first glance...

    But what I really wanted to point out, is how much the structure of the poem coincides with the content.
    You can just see the words climbing their way through..

    very nice,

    Matt
    | Posted on 2012-06-14 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      you were once smooth to hang on to...what happened?

    where did the plant i once knew go...the one i could depend on for love and sustenance.

    you grew apart from me...and now i am trying to grow alone and stronger...and i will...

    i really like the analogy i read here.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-06-14 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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