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    dots Submission Name: Field of Statuesdots
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    Author: Mieko
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 253/209/99
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsField of Statuesdots
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    Field of Statues

    I pull you in
    I seek only you
    From within your magnificent grin
    I basked, i grew

    the stone
    all around me, gray and artfully designed
    crafted with only one thing in mind
    art, perfection, desire

    for what is art? if only
    to desire something in our deepest soul, personified
    reflected and shown

    Cast off this air of beauty
    Let all of your sins be known
    for in the darkest day we know
    that love is only
    love is only
    is only
    only
    love

    I stand alone
    in this field of stone
    statues that reflect
    someone i used to know
    someone I used to know
    I used to know...




    Submitted on 2012-06-15 16:50:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like how you move the words and it is really interesting...the I ending I suggest;

    someone I used to know
    I used to know...
    just this the repetition I don't like so much...but that's just me..

    jen
    | Posted on 2012-08-31 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      we often view art as we want to see it...and the same for significant others...we are blinded by love and see what we want to see...

    i see a speaker here wishing that original vision of the other person would return.

    it's like finding out the truth and wanting the lie back.

    i like where this moves.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-06-15 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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