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    dots Submission Name: Astronaut Loverdots
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    Author: lebeauvide
    ASL Info:    24/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 75/295/165
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAstronaut Loverdots
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    In this world that we have built together,
    the freckles on your back make up constellations.
    I have never seen anything so beautiful
    as the nebulae that grew out of your eyes,
    where the pigments collide and create even more expansive cosmic designs.

    You are time and space, and I am but a traveler.
    I will never be able to reach the end of you,
    for I could never truly understand you.
    Even after years of study, there will still be things that I do not understand, because you are a mystery and I like that about you.




    Submitted on 2012-06-19 00:17:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well, it's pretty, and simple, and honest, and the flow is good, but I couldnt shake off the feeling that I'd read this soemwhere before. How another person is a universe, ever expanding etc etc to me it lacked that 'heart-jump' moment, which I had when I read the comment below:

    i think that its a sign that the freckles in our eyes are mirror images and when we kiss they perfectly align

    now that's such a beautiful idea, I won't be able to get rid of it till the end of the day...
    | Posted on 2012-06-19 00:00:00 | by expiring_touch | [ Reply to This ]
      i really appreciate this piece.
    after having watched a few programs on the expanse that is space and universe and whatever i can take the basics ive learned and see how they can be applied to another person... especially to one that i REALLy want/need to know eveyrthing about and how every time we go out for dinner or lie awake at night coz neither of us can sleep i learn something COMPLETELY new about them...

    my husband and i have been married for 2 years almost and last week i just found out that his folks almost sent him to spain [some sort of adoption agreement thing] but his younger brother went instead coz my husband was older and knew who his family was and what his culture was etc etc etc.. imagine if my husband had been sent to spain as a kid... i would never have met him at some random party in ethiopia and we would not be married today... and its those moments that make me truely grateful for the way the story has played out and yet make me hungrier to find out eveyrthing about him.. he didnt think to tell me any of this earlier coz it doesnt really matter to him.. its just part of his story like me wanting to drive forklifts when i was three years old...

    love is a frightening thing... its almost impossible to find the bottom..

    the image i appreciate most in this piece is the constellations of freckles on their back... it reminds me somewhat of the iron and wine song 'such great heights'

    i think that its a sign that the freckles in our eyes are mirror images and when we kiss they perfectly align
    | Posted on 2012-06-19 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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