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    dots Submission Name: Peace Insidedots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 41/64/76
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
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    dotsPeace Insidedots
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    She is walking on the cracked pavement. The feeling of the air is soft on her skin; it is peaceful amongst all the silver lights that wistfully float against the blue sky in full daylight. The tree leaves hang low and their yellow veins shine apart from the emerald green fibers as the sun pierces through them, inviting hands to brush them gently. A seedling of a poplar or dandelion dances in the air right in front of her and she lifts her hands around the seed so that there is a circle of flesh encasing it without touching. The seedling floats there as she stands. The pedestrians walk by her without glancing, and the cars drive by in their normal rustic rumble on ash vault with sandstone crushing against their tires.




    Submitted on 2012-06-20 02:36:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really good...I can't even make something like this, you showed a rare skill in describing the little details. its like I know what you're trying to say and I can see it too in my mind..

    love it
    jen
    | Posted on 2012-08-25 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      This is excellent Hi! You are showing a mastery here of the detail that a writer needs to include in a novel to give the reader the information he needs to properly visualize a story in print. As the written form cannot provide other information (such as visual clues, sounds, smells, etc., the written form must add these, particularly if their effect is important to the story).

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2012-06-25 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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