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    dots Submission Name: Remorsedots
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    Author: metallichick786
    ASL Info:    32/F/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 78/85/52
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsRemorsedots
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    There is no warming a frozen heart
    No turning back the hands of time
    My head lies hoplessly in my hands
    My eyes swollen with remorse

    I cannot shake the deeds I've done
    The crime's been commited
    And my sins mine solely to bear
    Self loathing fills my withered soul

    The walls seem closer each day
    Closing in my body, trapping me
    The devil sits on my shoulder
    He whispers that it's time




    Submitted on 2012-06-20 15:58:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good to see a post by you Caitlyn!

    Your fine talent as a writer shows here, and your poem tells a lucid story and hints at possible consequences, but not certainty (which is good, leaving the reader to use his own imagination to extend the story).

    "There is no warming a frozen heart
    No turning back the hands of time"

    these are excellent opening lines....they alert the reader to the theme, and build anticipation....

    nice work, pretty lady!
    | Posted on 2012-06-25 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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