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    dots Submission Name: If only I could articulate it.dots
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    Author: Raye
    ASL Info:    21/female/Okc,Ok
    Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 52/82/35
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 565
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1090



    Description:
       A Prose for my sister. All the things I wish I could tell her but I can't seem to say out loud.


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    In all the time I have known you, from small infant to mother of your own children, I knew that one day you would grow to be an amazing and brilliant woman. I knew when you were small and sick that you would grow big and strong. I knew when I looked at you when you were young and vulnerable that you would be beautiful and that I would want to protect you. When Rebel died and you cried I knew that you would love deeply. When you fell off your bike and got hurt, I was so scared, but then you laughed and I knew you would be alright no matter what life had to throw at you. And now here we are you are grown up with a child of your own and your a mommy now, but I'm still your big sister and I still love you. So even though I am gone and you may think that I never think of you, remember that you are always on my mind and in my heart. I'll always be here if you need me and I'll always want to protect you, it's in my nature. But I know you are going to be just fine, you are an amazing, beautiful, strong, and brilliant woman. I couldn't ask for anything more.




    Submitted on 2012-06-20 16:07:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i hope she reads this...it will tug at her heart strings...you have tugged at mine.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-06-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, it's a poem, not a mere paragraph. "Prose poems" are called that, and are quite unmistakeable!

    I have two daughters who enjoy being sisters. What you have writted here brought a tear to my eye.

    Eyes. I have two. Sorry.
    | Posted on 2012-06-21 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      i have no critique for this post, but I do have a suggestion: send this to your sister and she'll know exactly how you feel.

    If only? No.
    Successfully articulated? Yes.
    | Posted on 2012-06-20 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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