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    Author: crashley
    Elite Ratio:    0.43 - 3/26/100
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    she stood up and wiped her hands on her jeans,
    looked down at me,
    her hair all wild like it used to be.
    her lips were perfect
    and i wanted them on mine
    so badly, all of me was desire.
    i thought i may fissure, break in two;
    they made me ache and I knew what it meant to
    want
    she said "I will always love you."



    but then she left.




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