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In ancient days

Author: joeyalphabet
ASL Info:    50/not likely/somewhere..
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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In ancient days

In ancient days the chosen people blessed of God
invaded the Land held by heathens and
slaughtered the pagan unbelievers

Who do we war against today?

In ancient days they stoned Women as unclean
for yielding to the pleasures their men
demanded in drunken nighttime revelries

Who do we stone today?

In ancient days they killed the Ram to please God
the slitting of its throat and burning of
its flesh a pleasant odor to his nostrils

Who do we kill today?

Submitted on 2012-06-24 18:08:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The answer to that is simply: people. No, they are not monsters, no, they are not sub-human, no, it doesn't matter how they treat their women. We kill other people, just like you and me, mainly because we can and also because it has become convenient...
| Posted on 2012-07-13 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
  In ancient days it was true that if we all loved each other and respected the ass-holes unanimous facts in holy shitness we would all be better off today. But we were too tribal, too secular, we couldn't see the forest for the trees. Perhaps the essence of our being is the logical counterpart for the matrix of our subjectively conclusive social fragmentation, or perhaps we are evolutionally incapable of cumulatively rational correlation. In any case it is beyond our subjugatably rational cohesive coercion to intercede in mass on our own behalf. Our conceptual abilities have been thwarted by the unmitigatedly individual nature of our extraneous conclusiveness. But in america the individual rules, he is afforded inalienable rights endowed by his creator. The enemy will never look the same!!!

| Posted on 2012-06-24 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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