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    dots Submission Name: Nirvanadots
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    Author: 777sacrites777
    ASL Info:    24/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 343/189/83
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 941
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    Bytes: 832



    Description:
       Explaining the desire for the "perfect soulmate" that only exists in dreams.


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    dotsNirvanadots
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    I close my eyes
    in hopes to dream;
    for in this sweet slumber
    is you I've seen.

    You're impeccably flawless,
    for your touch I thrive.
    Too bad I can't have you,
    my angel, in real life.

    Conscientiousness can wait;
    reality can't compare.
    To this reverie I'll escape,
    though the chance is rare.

    I'd rather vegetate all day
    searching through the mist,
    chugging NyQuil if I must
    for my imaginary bliss.

    Chase away the silhouettes
    that haunt our paradise
    before I succumb to contemplations
    of paying the ultimate price

    for this one-way ticket
    without refunds or returns
    to a permanent nirvana
    to which I yearn.




    Submitted on 2012-06-26 01:04:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this work a lot. It takes skill to rhyme and have it not sound childish (in my opinion). This is a truly great piece.
    -Megan
    | Posted on 2012-06-27 00:00:00 | by MonsterMonster | [ Reply to This ]


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