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    dots Submission Name: Bursted Bubble Dreamsdots
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    Author: ladydeathstrike
    ASL Info:    27/F/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 259/284/94
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsBursted Bubble Dreamsdots
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    "In times like these we must stick together."
    that's the message we emit.

    We are unwillingly bound together by the burdens we share,
    by debts unpaid.

    We wear the shackles of someone else's mischief,
    we carry the cross of those we carry,
    atop that golden seat.

    we are raceless,
    faceless speckles of human beings.

    The dread creeps in and we hold hands,
    praying for the darken night to end,
    we squat and huddle in.

    we, horders of the world,
    squatters of the unwanted, the unpaid.
    A bursted bubble of dreams.

    Dreams of those gleaming citizens
    who now blind us with their pride,
    look down on us and feel shame.

    We weren't always the soot,
    we once gleamed and had rights.

    Now we represent the other side,
    now we huddle in as the darken night creeps in.

    and we cling to the skirts and ankles of those who gleam.

    We,the unclean.




    Submitted on 2012-06-26 12:13:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow do i like this, being a fellow illinoisian...

    our state has gone to shit.

    and we are the ones who have to help balance it all...as if we were the ones who screwed things up in the first place...we are like slaves...beaten, overworked, and blamed for all the catastrophe...

    we definitely "wear the shackles of someone else's mischief"!!!!!!!!!!

    your poetry in general is a sign of the times...a voice of reason within the insanity...a chronicle of how downhill we are going, in general.

    there must be hope.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-06-26 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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