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    dots Submission Name: Un Sortiedots

    Author: ladydeathstrike
    ASL Info:    27/F/Chicago
    Elite Ratio:    5.27 - 259/284/94
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsUn Sortiedots

    There is a need for change,
    a yearning to be addressed.

    A passion that needs seducing.
    A life seeking alteration.

    I close my eyes and I see a distant future, a possible dimension of happiness and raw passion.

    And this all happens in the house of my father, under the watchful eye of big brother.

    In the blink of an eye I dream and
    live a lifetime

    before I awake to the reality of minutes past.

    I live more lifetimes in hidden minutes than hours in this sadden reality.

    There must be a way to stir the pot.

    There has to be an exit, un sortie.. to the potentials of this life and into the beginnings of one that tingles my skin to excitement.

    There has to be more than.... just this.

    Submitted on 2012-06-26 12:20:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "happiness and raw passion" do seem so distant...

    i see this poem as about carrying baggage...living life carefully once there has been a preponderance
    of pain...we want to exit that pain...and find a new place to feel again...to experience love again without looking over our shoulder.

    what a great line.."a passion that needs seducing"

    yup--love that one.

    | Posted on 2012-06-26 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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