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    dots Submission Name: the cliffsdots

    Author: pioneerheart
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 204/205/140
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsthe cliffsdots

    We trudged to the secret oasis right under suburbia
    Last hidden secret part hidden away ; with a small happy local crowd
    Better than the gas guzzling beach drive
    Only know by true locals
    Forbidden by theblaw, so alluring to a hikers willing to scrape or ache for next daysthe Arizona boys are happy here in California, for never seen such a lost,
    friendly , dangerous place.
    It is ours today.
    It claims a part of every memory worth recalling from here on. Amen

    Submitted on 2012-06-28 05:57:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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