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    dots Submission Name: Wonderlustdots
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    Author: monad
    ASL Info:    64/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1083/406/116
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 957
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 865



    Description:
       I'm reposting this in response to jacoberin's "Demolition 10"


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsWonderlustdots
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    I CAN BE WRONG AND STILL BE RIGHT
    IS THE REAL PARADOX TO HEIGHT
    A LONELY PILGRIM LOSES SIGHT
    OF ANSWERS THAT COULD BRING HIM MIGHT

    AND YET TO SEED THE ANSWERS CALL
    THE STALLION IS IN ITS STALL
    HE'S NOT PREPARED TO TAKE THE FALL
    FOR WHAT COULD BE IS CLEAR TO ALL

    THE ENDLESS PARADOX IN SIGHT
    THE TRUTH OF RIGHTEOUSNESS TO KNIGHT
    I FEAR TRAINED SEAL MUST FLY HIS KITE
    AND PRAY SURREAL COMES OUT TIGHT

    ACROSS THE ANCIENT CASTLE WALLS
    THE DEMURE TAINTED SHADOWS CRAWL
    TO FORM THE MORNING'S CLEARING CALL
    EFFUSIVE ALLUSIONS , IRRELEVANCE FALL

    THE ECHOS FROM THE GROTTO SWELL
    LIKE MEMORIES OF ANCIENT HELL
    THAT COMMAND THE OCEANS TO RESEND
    THE LOWLY FORCE WITH WHICH THEY'D BEND




    Submitted on 2012-06-28 14:43:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it, I do wonder when someone writes, when they interrupt a pattern such as: A, A, A and A. and then A, A, B, B if they want to add special emphasis on that section. the answers that bring him might that part I like especially like. I do feel empowered when I get answers to things. as far as being clear, (one of the suggestions below) reading things can be so subjective to our experiences and if I ponder anything long enough there would be clarity of some sort, you can post one thing and have a million different thoughts on it.
    | Posted on 2014-05-11 00:00:00 | by dementedsoul | [ Reply to This ]
      You are just the guy we need. Could you arrange a meeting between Osama bin Laden's ghost and the Pope?

    My symbolic algorithm calculator says it would cause an explosion
    in the Jerusalem Macdonald's. Gotta be a good idea?
    | Posted on 2012-08-10 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      "THE STALION IS IN ITS STALL"

    I assume you meant STALLION, but wanted to pick a nit anyhow...


    Did you originally post this in all caps? Just wondering...
    | Posted on 2012-07-01 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      This feels a little forced but then it is billed as religious. Where does philosophy end and religion begin? Deity, deity, who's got the deity? Nice writeup at http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Deity

    Endless paradox is also by design.

    Lots of good magic words in this one.
    Do you mean irrelevance?
    Excellent content.

    Lloyd

    | Posted on 2012-06-30 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      maybe surreal is better than real...

    lust wanes---it needs its strength back...

    i like "morning's clearing call"

    a starting over, a new morning...the knight refreshed and ready to fight again...fight for love.

    that lonely pilgrim has lost his way...and needs to find it again...

    his ship lost.

    i really like this...it is smooth and visual...and i am glad my words can inspire in some way.

    thanks for this.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-06-28 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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